Firstly, everybody agrees if I say that genetically modified organism are not natural. Since the day the human started to mess around with nature, it went worse and worse and worse every time. From the beginning of our society's until a couple of decades, the destruction of nature was approxymatly going at the same rythm than the reonstruction. Their was no problem with that. but since toxic product were born, the problems are always decreasing. Their are no progress! The problem with genetically modified organism is that, the more you inject superficial products in nature, the more you destroy it. And the more you destroy it, the more you inject superficial products in it. It is a vicious circle. Nature has always shown that if you gave it some time, it will restore from itself. But because we are in a rapid consumming society, we don't want to wait after nature. If we don't stop injecting GM organim in the nature, we will no longer have nature as we knew it.
Secondly, I wanted to bring the negative aspects of genetically modified organism on the human. Since we are born, we've been eating, breathing ans consumming the types of products. The problem is that our body is starting to acclimate these GM organisms. But the more the body acclimate, the more we're going to need those things. It is the same vicious circle as the one with environment. Our body are no longer used to natural product of the earth. For sure, even if you're having you own garden, their will be GM organisms in it. But if everybody makes a step ahead and start saying no to GM products, nature will make it's work and the human body could go back at eating some real food, from a healthy nature.
Finally, I really don't think genetically modified organisms are good, neither for the environement or for the human. I also think that if every person could make an effort to try to turn their back on GM product, we could go back to a more healthy world, or at least, we would be in the right direction.
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Genetically modified organisms have always been, and will probably stay (18, 24), a (17) part of a huge debate. The main questions that have been raised are about (17) the effects that it (15) may cause on the environment, on our animal (23) and even on us, (24) humans (22) being (14). Both sides of this controversial debate are bringing (11) convincing arguments to support their point of view. I tried to distangle (22) everything to have (18) my own vision on the (17) genetically modified organisms (18). I'll first give my point of view on the environment (18) side and then, (24) I'll give (18) it (18) on (17) what I think about (17) the effects on the human system. (23)
ReplyDeleteFirstly, everybody agrees if I say (17) that genetically modified organism (14) are not natural. Since the day the human (18) started to mess around with nature, it went (11, 18) worse and worse and worse (17) every time. (23) From the beginning of our society's (22) until a couple of decades, (23) the destruction of nature was approxymatly (22) going at the same rythm (22) than (18) the reonstruction. (22, 23) Their was (8) no problem (14) with that. (23) but (9) since toxic product (14) were born (18), the problems are (11) always decreasing. (23) Their are (8) no progress! The problem with genetically modified organism (14) is that, the more you inject superficial products in (18) nature, the more you destroy it. And (9) the more you destroy it, the more you inject superficial products in it. (23) It is a vicious circle (18). Nature has always shown that if you gave (11) it some time, it will restore (18) from (17) itself. But (9) because we are in a rapid consumming society, (19, 16, 22, 18) we don't want to wait after (18) nature. If we don't stop injecting GM organim (14) in (18) the (17) nature (18), we will no longer have nature as we knew (11) it. (23)
Secondly, I wanted to bring (18) the negative aspects of genetically modified organism (14) on the (17) human (14). Since we are (18) born, we've been (17) eating (11), breathing (10) ans (22) consumming (10) the (15) types of products. The problem is that our body (14) is (18) starting to acclimate (18) these GM organisms. But (9) the more the body acclimate (10), the more we're going to need those (18) things. (23) It is the same vicious circle (18) as the one with environment. (23) Our body (14) are no longer used to natural product (14) of (18) the earth. For sure, (17) even if you're (17) having (11) you (22) own garden, their will be GM organisms in it. But (9) if everybody makes (18) a step ahead and start (10) saying no to GM products, nature will make (18) it's (21) work and the human body could (18) go back at eating some real food, from a healthy nature. (23)
Finally, I really don't think genetically modified organisms are good, neither (17) for the environement (22) or for the (17) human (14). I also think that if every person could make an effort to try to turn their back (14) on GM product (14), we could go back to a more healthy world, or at least, we would be in the right direction.
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